Peer Assessment Feedback

Personal Feedback

As part of this project, we as the students, must understand what features in our film openings that gain us marks and lose us marks. Peer assessment is a good way of doing this because we can advise each other on ways to improve our film openings while getting to grips with the mark scheme.

I chose to assess the first draft for the film opening by Josh, Sam and Jamie.

Name: Outlaw                        Genre: Action

What elements of this sequence did you feel were successful? 

• In the opening thirty seconds the camera is very controlled with a good blur effect where the camera loses focus. The protagonist walks past in an army attire and as he walks past it creates many enigma codes for the audience, such as where is he going? or Why is he dressed like a soldier?
• The tracking shots are good for showing the narrative. The panning movements in the gunshot scene in the latter stages of the opening exhibits the dark setting well creating suspense.

Were there any aspects of the sequence which you felt were confusing/distracting/missing?

• The opening doesn't reveal any key aspects of the narrative and the relevance of the characters or the setting.
• I feel as though the ending of the opening with the blank screen could have shown what happens after the gunshot scene, instead of ending the opening without any understanding of what could happen next.

List 2 things you feel would have improved this sequence and explain your opinion.

• There is mostly non-diegetic sound which makes it seem like a music video, to improve this the group could introduce more dialogue as oppose to having a music track that plays right the way through.
• Finally, I think that the group could use a video effect when the protagonist fires the gun at the clown, for example they could show the gunshot with smoke coming out the gun after he fires it.