First Draft Self-Assessment

First Draft Video

What elements of this sequence did you feel were successful?

• The scene that we found most successful is the one where I am sitting in the living room packing the drugs. I particularly like this scene because of the use of props and also the varied camera angles used. These different shots allow for different titles to appear on the screen which fit well.
• Furthermore, I think that the use of the GoPro is very useful as it shows we have considered different types of points of view. In addition, we ensured that we had a variety of diegetic and non-diegetic sounds including the music and the dialogue. 

Were there any aspects of the sequence which you felt were confusing/distracting/missing?

• We decided to experiment in the first draft by switching to different days however by putting this into practice it actually became confusing, consequently we altered this in our final draft and made the whole opening set at night time. 
• The alley way scene was a little confusing because the audience wouldn't know what is going on however as the film progresses the narrative becomes more clearer because the character is shown packaging the goods.

List 2 things you feel would have improved this sequence and explain your opinion.

• In order to improve this sequence, we would need to vary the transitions between different scenes. At the moment we have only used straight cuts between scenes so we could use different transitions such as dissolves or slides. 
• Another way to improve the first draft would be to tweak the titles because they are currently different sizes and they all need to be the same size to maintain that professional look.