Summary Of Feedback from Peers

First Draft Video

What elements of this sequence did you feel were successful?

• Many people who reviewed our first draft wrote that they admired the many different camera angles used. Furthermore, some even included they enjoyed the variation of camera point of views, such as the use of the GoPro showing the main character on a bike.
• A lot of people said that the music was suitable because it creates an on edge atmosphere. One person said that "The music went well with the drug scene and the characterisation was good". This is exactly what we intended to portray when we chose the song because it helps tell the narrative. 

Were there any aspects of the sequence which you felt were confusing/distracting/missing?

• Some viewers felt that the scene with the GoPro where I am cycling down the road was confusing. This is because the scene switches from day to night in an instance and this confused some people. In order to rectify this we will re-shoot the scene in darkness to prevent viewers from being unable to understand.
• Others felt that there was little dialogue throughout the opening, however we have added in some more dialogue which was not included in the first draft.

List 2 things you feel would have improved this sequence and explain your opinion.

• One common area for improvement noted by many viewers is the alley way scene where the goods are handed over. They noticed that the conversation in this scene was unclear and in some places looked somewhat staged. In order to improve this we are going to re-shoot this particular scene so that the dialogue is more clear and viewers can see every detail.
• We also need to improve the transitions between shots, some people noticed that the transitions are too quick without any effects such as "film dissolves" or "slides".